Job Vacancy and Cover Letter
Hello my good readers, in this chance I would like to post example of job vacancy and I'm also post about the cover letter. Hopefully, it will benefits you in the future. Don't forget to read and leave a comment so I can improve my blog content later :)
JOB VACANCY
COVER LETTER
Jalan Pulau Menjangan No. B7
Singaraja, Bali / 81151, Indonesia
Phone: (+62) 81936689495
Email: handidwikyrash@yahoo.co.id
Human
Resources Manager
Inspire
Ventures Indonesia
Jalan Taman Kemang No. 32A, South Jakarta
DKI Jakarta 12730, Indonesia
DKI Jakarta 12730, Indonesia
25th May 2017
Dear Mr./Ms.,
By this letter, I would like to
apply for the HR Manager Assistant as advertised in central HRD website.
Having recently
obtained my bachelor degree in President University majoring in Human Resources
Management, I wish to bring my knowledge and skills with
the commitment to work as the HR Manager Assistant in your company.
Although I don’t have 2
year experiences in HR, but in my previous internship at Samsung Electronics
company has improve my skills in doing administrative things to support HR
department. I’m also getting involved in some organizational activities, as I’m
responsible for typing proposal and reports and I have become vice project
manager for 2 events. Other than that, I’ve learned well about Indonesia labor
laws and regulatory requirements as one of the job requirement of your company.
That experiences driven me to be able to work under pressure and thought
critically. Furthermore, I’m highly skilled in creating and delivering
presentations both in Bahasa Indonesia or English, as I’m also confident and professional
in completing my tasks.
For additional details
regarding my qualification and educational background, please kindly find
enclosed my CV. Thank you for your consideration and I’m looking forward to
hearing from you.
Respectfully yours,
Komang
Handi Dwi Darma Santhi
18 comments:
Hi, Handi! You really did a good job and your cover letter is really nice. However, i have a suggestion for your CL. I think you should add an information about how well you are in working with other people, especially that yoi are applying for HR manager assistant. You have to let them know that you can work well with other people. Keep it up, Handi!
Where can I find the links for your CV
Hi Handi,
your cover letter is good enough but I think it will be better if you add the reason why you would like to work for the company. It will be more convincing. thankyou
Greetings Handi. I really interested in reading your own-made Cover Letter making and I’m sure you’ve put lot of efforts in making one. I reckon that you have the skills in writing English in a good and clear way. But my suggestion is that you could divide your 3rd paragraph to make a new paragraph since in a nutshell it will make yours look more neat, clean, and balanced. Anyway it is such a great CL and hope we can help each other!
Hi Handi!
Your cover letter is well done and i think your english is really good. However you made a vocabulary error in which the word "learned" should be "learnt"
Keep up the good work!
Dear, Handi. I have read your cover letter and I believe that you would like to highlight your characters and all your experienced as possible in it. I found you have good potential as what you have mentioned. However, you need to write it more structural so you will find it "bloom at the end". Therefore, you need to divide the section where you are highlight your skills or characters and your experience. Then, you may elaborate it well. Overall, you have done it well :) :D Thank you~
It is great already. To make it look better, especially for the reader to read is better to write I am and do not instead of writing "I'm and don't" :)
Dear Handi,
I found your writing of cover letter is really good. However, I have one input about your writing, you should avoid abbreviate word such as "I don't", "I'm" and "I've" since this is formal letter.
yet, it is still a great job. Good luck!
Hi Handi,
Yours is well-done. It is interesting, easy to understand, and you didn't beat around the bush. However, I think you should change this sentence: ' but in my previous internship at Samsung Electronics company has improve ' to 'but my previous internship at Samsung Electronics company has improved'. No need to use the word 'in' and add 'ed' for the word improved as you use 'has' before it.
Thank you. Keep it up!
Hi Handi,
your cover letter is well made and prepared but I think it will be better if you put the reason why you would like to work for the company, your goals for the company and why would they hire you. It will be more convincing. thankyou
Hi, Handi!
Great Cover letter! I think its better to give more explanation on the skill. Good Luck!
Hi Komang!
it is really interesting when you have already joint two events in your campus. I think it is a good experience that can be brought to the job vacancy in the reality world. In addition, with your skill in presentation and creating paper, it can be a good modal to make you sustain in nowadays market competition
Hey Handi!
I was looking for any examples of application letter and I think yours can be a pretty good examples. I do agree that you need to avoid some abbreviations in writing this letter due to professionality. And I think you can talk a little things you know about this company (e.g. ranks, reputation)in which you can relate on your own reason to be interested working in this company. But overall, you did a good job! All the best!
well done Handi sayaag ;) your CL is awesome
The recruiter must be impressed :D
but for me it will be better if you remove the word "in" at the sentence of "Although I don’t have 2 year experiences in HR, but in my previous internship at Samsung Electronics company"
and maybe you can put the reason thy you want to join that company hehe
keep it up honey :*
Hi Komang!
You did great job, I think all the comments and suggestions already given above. so keep practicing!
Dear Handi.
This cover letter is very good and rich in content, and It would be better to write more of the reasons why you were fit for this job.
Best wishes!
Hi, Handi. I have read your cover letter and it's quite good I think. You have stated your experiences and skills very clear.
However, I think you should reconsider about the use of 'driven' in "That experiences driven me to be able to work...)" sentence.
I think that's all from me as the others already mentioned what and how should be changed.
Best wishes for you ;)
[COVER LETTER REVISION]
Jalan Pulau Menjangan No. B7
Singaraja, Bali / 81151, Indonesia
Phone: (+62) 81936689495
Email: handidwikyrash@yahoo.co.id
Human Resources Manager
Inspire Ventures Indonesia
Jalan Taman Kemang No. 32A, South Jakarta
DKI Jakarta 12730, Indonesia
25th May 2017
Dear Mr./Ms.,
By this letter, I would like to apply for the HR Manager Assistant as advertised in central HRD website.
Having recently obtained my bachelor degree in President University majoring in Human Resources Management, I wish to bring my knowledge and skills with the commitment to work as the Human Resources Manager Assistant in your company. As I know, your company has a good reputation and good performance, so I would like to work at your company.
Although I do not have 2 year experiences in Human Resources but my previous internship at Samsung Electronics company has improved my skills in doing administrative things to support Human Resources Department. I am also getting involved in some organizational activities, as I am responsible for typing proposal and reports and I have become vice project manager for 2 events.
Other than that, I have learnt well about Indonesia labor laws and regulatory requirements as one of the job requirement of your company. That experiences driven me to be able to work under pressure and thought critically. I am also able to do my job as a team and I can manage the member well and organize the activities so that everything can be fine. Moreover, I am highly skilled in creating and delivering presentations both in Bahasa Indonesia or English, as I am also confident and professional in completing my tasks.
For additional details regarding my qualification and educational background, please kindly find enclosed my CV. Thank you for your consideration and I’m looking forward to hearing from you.
Respectfully yours,
Komang Handi Dwi Darma Santhi
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